My first hopscotch story!

hopscotch
story

#1

OK, soooo...:wink:
a lot of people have been making stories, some based hopscotch, some not.:wink:
so I thought why not make my own?:wink:
so I did!:wink:
here is the link! Dunno why but I can't copy and paste in google docs!:wink:
you know what? I'll just take a screenshot!:wink:



Uh, any better-than-me authors out there, can u edit and improve my work, uh..:wink:
from the top of my head...:wink:
@LotsaPizza :wink:
@OrangeScent1 :wink:
@CreativeCoder :wink:
@Rawrbear :wink:
u can just copy n' paste it, and edit it ,or, gimme ur email and I'll invite u! :wink:
happy writing :wink:

-(trying to sound formal by signing off :stuck_out_tongue_closed_eyes:) crazygoat

lol
troll
holl
moll
toll
foll
soll
koll
(donno what I'm doing)
OH!!!
and...
should I continue with this story?

  • yes
  • no
  • u s-uck
  • I don't care 'bout u
  • ur the worst writer ever
  • ur the best

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#2

Hi.


#3

Some of your capitalization is wonky, but overall, it's a good story.


#4

where?


#5

Hi. I think you need Google Drive to copy and paste.


#6

I have google drive! I am using me computer


#7

I don't know then.

 My Hopscotch email is creativecoderhopscotch@gmail.com

I can help edit.


#8

sent invitation @CreativeCoder


#9

The Edit and Published buttons are capitalized in Hopscotch. Also, the quotes between published (it's near, "I quickly flicked to...") aren't needed unless you capitalize all the letters, because that's how it is in Hopscotch. One of your "Hopscotch"s is hopscotch (it's before "again, worried about..."), which is supposed to be Hopscotch. "you" in "you have been hacked by BinaryHacker6" should be capitalized and there should be punctuation there.


#10

Also the picture/cover should be on top of "Chapter 1", not after.


#11

it is after


#12

so....
was the beginning good?

  • yes
  • no
  • it sucked
  • OMG IT WAS THE BEST
  • it was sooo bad I want to spew!

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#13

I LOVE this story!
Might want to work on grammar, especially capitalization and verb confusion.


#14

There is a lot of problems when I write (just giving advice)
Never make this mistake I tend to just write no period no comma no nothing just write please never do that ever


#15

Can I help? mobcraft120@gmai l .com


#16

yeah, my grammar is bad, I know...
I'm not bad at writing storys but grammar?
I'm bad at!


#17

can u help, @LotsaPizza?
I understand if u don't want to !


#18

Oh yeah and sorry I left suddenly last night. My iPad randomly died for no apparent reason.


#19


#21

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